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  1. tonybs

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    Did you ever have a crush on your teacher? I did. For me, it was Miss Greenway. Though it was more than just a crush, it was pure, true, love. A love which burned brighter than a billion suns. Unfortunately, of all the subjects she could be my teacher in, it was English. My school reports were all glowing, except for English. English is something I struggled with. Spelling and grammar just doesn't make any sense. Of course, all the spelling and grammar Nazis just love that, they can't read what I wrote, they just see the errors and ignore everything else. Fuck them, it’s their loss.

    For Miss Greenway I tried, and she appreciated my efforts. My reports from Miss Greenway would all say, "Tries hard." She made words special for me, I wrote stories and she liked them. An appreciative comment from her made struggling to make the words behave all worthwhile. In my sophomore year, I wrote her a special story. I put my heart and soul into it; I wanted it to be perfect for her.

    Then came the day I was going to show it to her. That was the day her name changed. She announced to the class that she was now "Mrs. King." I didn't quite process this news; I was excited to show her my story. I stayed behind after class and showed her the story. Her first comment, I'd misspelled a word in the first sentence. I was crushed, she didn't care one whit about the story, just about a stupid spelling. I slunk out of the classroom, my eyes burning, I was trying to hold back the tears. On top of it, she'd gone and got married. MY Miss Greenway was now someone else's.

    I resolved that if I couldn't have her, no one would. I snuck home and grabbed a gun out of dad's cabinet. I knew where he kept the keys. I selected my favorite, the .45 M1911 automatic, and a clip of ammunition. Then, I staked out Miss Greenway's car (she'd always be Miss Greenway to me). It wasn't long before her car flashed as she unlocked it. I stepped out of my hiding place and brought the gun to bear.

    Then, Ow! Ow! Ow! PAIN! My muscles spasmed, and there was awful pain all over. The pain passed thank God, I was lying on the ground and my muscles were not cooperating. I couldn't have pulled a trigger even if I were still holding the gun. Looking over me was a guy; he was holding something. He addressed me, "I can't believe how stupid I was." He was looking at me saying it, like he was implying I was the stupid one. He continued, "Look kid, I know you don't have a clue, so I'll make it easy for you. I'm you. I'm you from your future. I'm also Mr. King, so you do get to bang her. You don't have to beat off to those bikini shots forever."

    I could see the gun beside me, I was trying to make an arm work to get it. He then showed me what was in his hand, "You've also just learnt, Tasers are a bitch. Now beat it before Dad notices the gun's gone." Then, he walked off. My limbs gradually started to work, and I got up. I was trying to make sense of what he said, but I heeded his last piece of advice, I put the gun back and no one was ever the wiser.

    I wondered, could the rest of what he said be true. He knew my greatest desire was Miss Greenway, to "bang" her as he crudely put it. I'd never told that to anyone, someone could guess that though. I certainly hoped no one else knew about the pictures I'd taken of Miss Greenway with the long lens, or that I'd regularly beat off while looking at them. They were still in the locked and password protected files, I didn't see how anyone could have known about them, except me.

    So now I had a new fantasy, a grown up me goes back in time and successfully woos Miss Greenway. That kept me busy nights. I tried even harder in her class now, knowing somewhere, or somewhen I was banging her. I liked to think it was my doing when she came in extra happy some mornings. I wondered what I'd been doing that morning, and thought about that at night. She gave me a glowing review on the story, A+, and she wanted it published in the school magazine. There were only a few red marks on the printout, where she'd marked the errors for correction. I could forgive her that remark now.

    So my life ran its expected course. I graduated high school; I wasn't Valedictorian thanks to the C in English. I got my B.S. in Physics, I got my Ph.D. I did post doc work. All the while I was looking for some clue to time travel. Someway, I'd go back, stop myself making a big mistake, and of course, most important, get to bang Miss Greenway.

    Eventually I found it. Buried in Modern Physics Letters A, was a clue. Along with another I'd just read in the Journal of Physics. Put them together and I could see how to deflect a momentum vector along the time axis, in other words, time travel. Of course, it only worked on the microscopic scale, on protons and electrons. It'd make an interesting experiment to do at CERN. It'd probably win me a Nobel prize, but I had something much more important to do with the idea, get to bang Miss Greenway.

    I worked on the theory until I could make it work on the macroscopic scale. That is, a practical application. Something I could use to travel in time personally. Once I'd gotten the theory worked out, I worked on making the theory practice. The apparatus needed eight magnetrons in a carefully phased linear oscillation. The easiest way to source the magnetrons is from microwave ovens, and speaker transducers made ideal linear oscillators.

    How far you traveled in time depended on the speed you were traveling at the time of the deflection. It works out at about 10 years for every meter per second you're traveling (about four and a quarter years for every mile per hour). The convenient factor of 10 there arises from the coincidence that the number of seconds in a year is about ten times the number of meters per second in the speed of light. I wanted to go back about 20 years, so I'd need to be traveling about 84 mph.

    For various reasons, a 2010 Crown Victoria was the best vehicle for this. A previous owner had pimped it with a multichannel sound system, so I could drive the speakers independently in the right phase. To satisfy the conservation of momentum, the car had to travel in the opposite direction in time, that is into the future. That'd mean I'd end up twenty years ago traveling at 84 mph, not in a car. That caused me some sleepless nights until I worked out that me and the car were an entangled system. So whatever happened to the car would happen to me, at least for a short time. So if the car crashed in the future, just after traveling through time, I'd also come to a halt in the past.

    So to make this work, I had to drive the aging Crown Vic at 84 mph into a solid object, which would still be a solid object 14 months in the future. I selected a mountain road with a sharp bend and a solid granite cliff to crash into. I had to trigger the deflection just as the car was crashing. The airbag sensor was perfect to trigger that. I considered making the speed I needed 88mph instead just to make it like in "Back to the Future," but then I'd have to wait another eight and a half months. I was too impatient for that.

    Do you know how hard it is to drive directly into a cliff? I do now, I chickened out a few times, but I just thought of the payoff; I'd get to bang Miss Greenway. I ended up sitting in a bed of nettles at the base of the cliff, alive and uninjured apart from the nettle rash. I'm glad jeans are mainly nettle proof.

    It was almost dawn where/when I ended up. I could see it was about 5am from the direction of the dawn. It was too light to get an idea of the time of year from the stars, but I guessed it was either June or September to have dawn at that time of day. I walked off towards town and managed to hitch a ride. The car's clock said it was 5:17, it also gave a date in September. That date sounded awful familiar.

    I got dropped off in town, and I walked to Miss Greenway's house. When I got there the door opened, and I hid behind a bush. Miss Greenway emerged, followed by an old dude. He said to her, "Well Mrs. King, are you ready to tell your students about your new name?"

    She replied, "I am, Mr. King." Then, they got in the car and drove off. This was not shaping up how I imagined. The old dude as Mr. King, not me. I was around the right age to be the guy who'd told me he was Mr. King, so I'd thought it'd be me. I also remembered that the date was the day I had that encounter, when Miss Greenway told us she was now Mrs. King.

    I needed answers, but I didn't have any. I walked off, thinking hard. I found myself at my old house, and I watched as Dad and a younger me emerged and drove off. Dad was going to drop me at school and go off to work. The house would be empty until I came home to get the gun. I knew where the spare key was, so I let myself in. The house was just like I remembered it. It felt really weird, it was so familiar, but I felt so out of place there, I felt like an intruder.

    That was when I saw, out of the window, Mr. King was driving back home. I thought I could get some answers. I grabbed the M1911 out of the gun cabinet, along with a clip of ammo. I had questions for Mr. King and that was going to help him answer.

    I walked back to Miss Greenway's house, strode up to the door and was just about to knock vigorously when the door opened slightly. Ow! Ow! Ow! PAIN! Fuck, the dude tased me. I still remembered what that was like from all those years ago, I still hated it.

    Now I'm lying on the floor, I'm inside the house, my wrists and ankles are bound. The old dude is sitting there, watching me. Seeing me alert, he says, "I really can't believe how stupid I was. Falling for that twice. And thinking I was going to turn up here and be Mr. King, it takes time to woo a woman, I've been at this for ten years."

    I was trying to work out the implications of that when he got up and pulled a knife. Then I was more worried about the implications of the knife, but he just cut the bonds on my ankles and on my wrists, saying, "I did have some pointers for you, but you're really not worth it. Now get out of my house, I'll keep her for myself." Then, he walked off.

    The pistol was lying on the floor next to me so I grabbed that, and went after him, "Hey!"

    I saw him disappearing into the garage, so I shouted after him, "Hey you!" And shot at him. I think there was an explosion then, things are hazy. I'm lying on the floor of the living room, there's a smell of smoke and barbecued pork. In the garage there's a badly charred body, but no fire.

    I'm all, "Fuck, now what?" I wasn't thinking straight at that time. I did hide the body, I found a yard clippings bin in the back yard, wheeled it inside and managed to get the body in that. That got it out of the way for then, I'd worry about getting rid of it permanently later. I found the Taser and an extra cartridge, which reminded me I had to go tase myself. I also needed to get the gun back in the cabinet so I could grab it. As I was walking home, I saw the car in the drive way, that was supposed to be parked at the school.

    I got home, cleaned the gun so you couldn't smell it'd been shot and put it away. Hopefully, no one would notice one missing slug. Back to Miss Greenway's I got the car and drove to school. I found a parking spot which looked familiar. Then, I went and hid.

    Half an hour later, I saw myself, my 15 year old self, find the car, and duck behind some bushes to lie in wait. I got the Taser ready, approached the bushes quietly on his blind side, then readied the Taser and unlocked the car. He stepped out of his hiding place and was pointing the gun in my direction, so I pulled the trigger on the Taser. It’s a lot better on this side of a Taser. The darts caught him square in the chest, and it ticked away as it does. He danced like he was at a Devo concert and went down.

    Shooting Miss Greenway really was the stupidest thing I ever thought of doing. So I stood over him, looked down and waited until some recognition sparked in his eyes. Then, I told him, "I can't believe how stupid I was. Look kid, I know you don't have a clue, so I'll make it easy for you. I'm you. I'm you from your future. I'm also Mr. King, so you do get to bang her." I still wasn't thinking straight, what was I going to do about Miss Greenway? I wasn't Mr. King, despite what I claimed, and I hadn't banged her yet. I remember how I used to think about Miss Greenway, so said to him, "You don't have to beat off to those bikini shots forever."

    He was looking around, he saw the gun on the ground beside him, but couldn't reach for it. I showed him the Taser, and said, "You've also just learnt, Tasers are a bitch. Now beat it before Dad notices the gun's gone." Then, I walked off. Once out of sight, I stopped to spy on him. He did manage to stand up, grab the gun and walk off.

    When he was out of sight, I got into the car, and tried to think what to do now. Then, the door opened, and Miss Greenway's voice was saying, "Well, Mr. King, you were right, no one cared that I'm Mrs. King now. Well, apart from maybe Matthew, I really think he's got a crush on me. He wrote me a special story." She got in the car, I was trying to think of how I'd explain not being me, she leaned across and kissed me. Then said, "So it worked then? I owe you a blowjob." She looked around nervously and reached for my zip and unzipped me.

    Like I said, I still wasn't thinking straight, my second biggest fantasy was about to come true, and I had to open my mouth. "I, err, what? I'm not sure I remember what's what, there was an explosion."

    She looked concerned, she looked at me very closely, "Oh, you poor dear, we should get you to the ER, you may be concussed."

    "I liked the blowjob idea." I really did, I wasn't thinking why she wanted to give me one, just that she wanted to.

    She laughed, "Yeah, there's obviously nothing wrong with you, but we really should get you checked out. Please, I promise I'll blow you when the doc says its OK."

    I reluctantly agreed and drove to the ER. If I had been concussed, driving wasn't a good idea, like I said, I wasn't thinking straight. It took a couple of hours, but we did get seen at the ER. They took a head X-Ray, and "found nothing," as Miss Greenway said laughing. The doctors were also amazed that I as a sixty-year old, as my ID said, was so fit, healthy, and young looking. Miss Greenway said I was working on rejuvenation technologies, so looked younger than I was. That made for as good a cover story as any I could think of.

    The docs were concerned that I'd lost my memory. Really, I'd never had those memories in the first place, but I wasn't telling anyone that. In the absence of any other signs of a concussion, they let me go. We walked out to the car, and true to her word, Miss Greenway reached for my zip. She again looked around nervously, then bent down to my dick. She took me into her mouth, wow! This was good. I'd had a few blowjobs before, but this was the best ever. I may be biased, seeing as it was Miss Greenway's mouth. Also, I hadn't had sex, even jacked off for a while with all the preparations I'd been making, so I wasn't going to last long. I didn't, and almost immediately blasted cum into her mouth and slumped down in the seat.

    She was leaning against me hugging me, and sighed contentedly. She said, "I'm sorry for doubting you. Obviously your thing worked; you look 30 years younger. And it obviously had a similar effect on him." She looked down at my crotch. "How long before he's awake again?" This was amazing, I'd just been granted my second biggest wish, and she wanted to work on the biggest one.

    I was just about to say it'd be about half an hour before I was ready again, when I thought a rejuvenated older me wouldn't know that yet. So I replied, "I dunno, but I want to find out." Then, I drove us to Miss Greenway’s house. It was only ten minutes to Miss Greenway’s, and when I parked in the driveway I was hard again. I was inspired to make my fantasy a reality. Before she could get out of the car, I took her hand, and pressed it against my crotch and hard on. "There really is nothing wrong with you, is there." She said.

    We walked inside, hand in hand. Inside, the smoke and BBQ smell was largely gone. I had had the presence of mind to open the windows to let the smell out. She looked at the charring in the garage and made sympathetic noises, but I was keen to get on. I dragged her out, then froze. "Where's the bedroom? I can't remember."

    She led me towards one door, I'd have guessed was one bedroom, saying, "How conventional of you. But as you say, boring, but comfortable." I was trying to pick up any clue as to our relationship, so far I got the idea I was a randy old goat and she was a nymphomaniac. This was even better than my fantasies.

    In the bedroom, I saw there were panties lying on the bed. There was a thought, Miss Greenway teaching me not wearing panties. I held her to me and kissed her. My hand roamed around her ass, then I slipped it into her waistband; she wasn't wearing any panties. I moaned, "The thought of you teaching, and your panties lying on the bed at home." I made a cross eyed face, with my tongue hanging out of my mouth.

    "You're beginning to remember then?" I didn't respond with words to that, I pulled down her skirt, and she stepped out of it. She was now half-naked. I don't know which half of her is more interesting when naked, but the bottom half has its charms, and was on display. I sank to my knees and pressed my face into her pussy. Soon, she sat down on the end of the bed and opened her legs to give me better access.

    I wasn't a virgin, I had banged a few girls, but I was not experienced by any measure. Mainly I'd been waiting for my chance at Miss Greenway. I tried my best with my limited experience to get Miss Greenway off, I wasn't that effective. I had fun trying, but it took her forever, and my jaw was about to seize up when she finally came. I held her while she recovered.

    She looked at me and said, "I hope you had fun teasing me like that." She looked severe, schoolmarmly at me, I shrank. Then, she broke into a big grin. "Do that to me any time, thank you." Then, she looked down at my crotch, and asked, "Can your little friend perform as well as your tongue?" With that she rolled over, stuck her ass in the air, and buried her face in the bed covers. I still hadn't seen her boobs yet, and she wanted me to bang her. My biggest fantasy was about to come true.

    I piled into Miss Greenway's pussy with all the grace of a horny fifteen-year old. I was just so eager for this; I forgot any technique I knew. I just pounded my dick into her pussy. I wasn't going to last long like this, despite the blowjob not so long ago. She shuddered, and I came. We both sort of fell over in slow motion, in opposite directions, so I didn't fall on her. She was lying there twitching, with my cum leaking out of her pussy. Man, that was an erotic sight. But, I was pretty much done for, all I could do was watch. I couldn't move.

    Amazingly, she was happy with my performance, she said, "God, I've missed you fucking me like that. Getting old really does suck, doesn't it? Being rejuvenated is much better."

    That was about the end of that episode, and I hadn't even seen her boobs. We got up and straightened ourselves and did normal domestic things for most of the rest of the evening. It was bedtime before I saw her totally naked. It may have been worth the wait. She was as perfect as I ever imagined her to be. I fucked her a couple of times that night and again in the morning. I went down on her a few times and she blew me again. It was fucking amazing being married to Miss Greenway.

    So I lived as the sixty-year old me, rejuvenated to thirty-five, that made me just as old as Miss Greenway, and boy was she horny. I did my best to keep up, and failed. I was happy to be totally worn out all the time; I still had a tongue. She liked me to use that on her before leaving for school in the morning, I WAS the reason why she'd get to school happy. She liked me to use it first thing she got home, if I hadn't otherwise regained my potency. She liked it last thing at night, and would often pop home at lunch time as well. I didn't work, so I was always available to her. When you love someone like I did, that just makes you contented.

    I didn't work; I didn't have to. I was rich; I'd made some very shrewd investments in the past decade. You could be that lucky if you were a genius, which I was, but not at investing, or if you had foreknowledge. Given what I'd said about wooing Miss Greenway for ten years, I'd bet on the foreknowledge. So I studied the market of the last decade, assuming I was going to need the knowledge sometime. I also used what I knew of the next 20 years to make the right bets on the emerging technologies in the coming business cycles.

    I still called her "Miss Greenway," even to her face, I never used her first name. She just took it as one of my eccentricities and stopped objecting. At heart I was a fifteen-year old boy acting out his fantasy of banging his English teacher, even if I were thirty-five and sixty officially. She'd even indulge me in some role-play, where I'd be the teenage student, and she'd be the English teacher. She said that was just "so delightfully naughty."

    She'd work out her frustrations and say things she just couldn't say as a teacher. I'd know she was starting a scene when she'd come home and call me by the name of one of her students. If it were "Tommy," I'd know I was in trouble, she'd usually end up spanking me for that. I tried to gently discourage the spankings, I didn't like that, but I was glad to help her. The best occasions were when she called me "Matthew," and I role-played being myself.

    It'd go something like this: I'd hear the door and go to greet her, I'd quite often get hard from just that, Pavlovian response I suppose. More often than not we'd have some form of sex when she got home. This time, instead of kissing me, she said, "Matthew, could you come see me after class."

    I replied, "Yes, Miss Greenway." Then, she walked off to her den.

    I waited for as long as I could, I doubt I could wait five minutes anticipating what's to come. I went to her den and knocked on the open door, "You wanted to see me Miss Greenway?"

    “Ah, Matthew, yes." She signaled me in to the den, and I stood beside her desk. She picked up a paper, and said, "Matthew, this love poem you wrote to me, it's terribly inappropriate."

    I stood downcast and said, "Sorry, Miss."

    "But it is very sweet, and I appreciate the thought." As she was speaking, she reached for my zip, and unzipped me. This was looking good for Matthew, I'm not sure if I'd had this particular fantasy, but I should have done. "But, you can't go around telling your English teacher things like this." She was quiet as she took me into her mouth. I don't remember much of the rest of her speech, interspersed with the blowjob, but she carried on in that vein. Standing became a problem, so I sat on the desk.

    Her mouth continued to work away at me, and I flashed back to scenes of her teaching. Sometimes I'd sit there and just watch her mouth, wondering if she'd sucked my (my older self's) dick that morning. Now, I knew the answer: she usually waited until she got home. I love a blow job from Miss Greenway, as I said it was my second biggest fantasy in school, and here I was living the fantasy.

    Eventually I came, I might say all good things have to come to an end, but that wasn't the end. She was licking her lips and saying, "Thank you for your present, but an Apple is a more traditional treat for your teacher. I also want to congratulate you for spelling 'cunnilingus' right this time, perhaps you can be taught after all." That comment harkened back to a scene where I left in tears when she criticized Matthew's spelling as her opening line. That had brought back too many memories. She was now more cautious when it came to criticizing spelling.

    That gave her an opportunity to put the scene back on a more normal track. "Cunnilingus is also an appropriate treat for your teacher." She raised her skirt to show me her panty-less pussy, and spread her legs. I didn't need any other cue, I knelt in front of her and lowered my lips to her wet receptive lower lips. As I said, we both liked this. In the den was one of her favorite places for it. She'd sometimes have me kneel under her desk serving her as she marked her student's work. That made me think, had she ever come while reading my work, that idea was such a turn on I'd be inspired to take her on the desk.

    With Miss Greenway satisfied, at least temporarily, she told me of what had inspired her. It was a love poem I'd written, though I hadn't explicitly addressed it to Miss Greenway, that was my intent. She had correctly guessed as much. I suggested she seal it with a kiss, and then trailed her finger through her wet pussy, and suggested she leave a wet finger mark. She did. I don't remember ever getting a paper back like that, I was so unobservant.

    I studied my own history, so I could "remember" things about me. I got pretty good at faking being Mr. King. She would call me Matthew, which was also Mr. King’s first name, as well as mine. That made life easy. As I studied him, I saw where a time traveler could waylay him and take over his life while arousing the least suspicion. What was really handy for this was his diaries. He kept a diary of his thoughts, hopes and deeds since he was seven years old, until just that point where he could be waylaid.

    I started to think I was going to need to make another time journey and be my older self and become Mr. King. I recreated the time travel theory. I hadn't brought any incriminating notes or technology back with me, so I had to work entirely from memory. But, once you've done the math one way once, it makes sense to do it that way again. This time I worked out a better way of doing it. This one would not need a car or a crash. I could do it standing still, it was also a lot more accurate. I think I could hit a particular minute, if not a particular second in history.

    I had a plan, but I had no need to execute it for fifteen years. Fifteen blissful years banging Miss Greenway. Towards the end of that, I did less banging, getting old sucks. It is so frustrating when your woman wants it five times a day, she was still a nympho. But, your body only lets you come once or twice a week. For a while I could still get a hard on, but not come. Then, the hard ons started failing as well. Not even little blue pills helped me there, I was just worn out. I still loved her, with a pure true love, I still satisfied her, and I took my satisfaction in that.

    Then, she was killed. She had an accident, the car suffered a software glitch and drove itself over a cliff. She died in a flaming heap; her body burnt beyond all recognition. I was heartbroken, I had nothing to live for, not in this time anyway. Google traced the glitch to a bug in their code and offered a fortune in compensation. I didn't care about that, I just wanted Miss Greenway back, and I knew how to do that.

    So I put my long on hold plan into action. I sent myself back in time. My new version of time travel was also better in that I could put myself down anywhen, and anywhere on the planet. Within some energetic constraints. Basically, I needed to be at the same potential, like the same altitude at both ends, or I risked being cooked or frozen, thanks to the conservation of energy.

    I went back twenty-five years to Denver Airport. There, Mr. King was changing planes on his transcontinental journey. He was speculatively flying West to find a new life, leaving all his family and friends behind in Queens. In his diary, he was bellyaching about some chick he'd broke up with. I think that's a bit extreme just for a girl, but it gave me the perfect opportunity to integrate myself into life as him.

    I followed him into a restroom, luckily it was empty. I tased him with a stun gun, not one of the ones which shoots darts, and bundled us into the handicapped stall. There, I changed clothes with his, and sent him on a different journey with the time machine. The time machine had come with me. I emerged from the rest room as Matthew King and no one was any the wiser.

    For a time, I disguised myself to look like him. We were pretty similar, but I changed a few things to look more like he did. Then, I made myself a "new look," and was me again. When family came out to visit they accepted me as him, I knew just about everything he did thanks to his diaries. The diaries were about the only thing he took with him.

    I set myself up to live comfortably, Mr. King had done well for himself and was looking towards retirement. I could draw on his retirement assets, there are ways of doing that and not be charged penalties for early withdrawal. I made a series of, what should have been, unwise bets on the Stock Market, and they paid off big time. You can do that if you know the future. The future here was my own personal past. I made enough to buy a house, and I found that Miss Greenway's house was on the market, so I bought that.

    At the same time I also looked up Miss Greenway, she was still doing her teaching credential. I went looking for her and found her in a coffee shop, looking glum. I'd been her husband for fifteen years now, I knew her. I also knew her history and knew what the matter was. I bought a couple of coffees, one was her favorite and sat myself down at her table. I opened with, "A soul as poetic as yours shouldn't be glum, here you are."

    She was startled, but when she saw the drink, she accepted. Then we talked, I'd missed talking to her so much since she'd died, but I tried to keep morbid thoughts out of it, and keep things light. I succeeded, I was invited back to her place. Now, I knew she was horny. Well, she's always horny, but this was a low point in her life, and she'd broken up with her previous boyfriend and not had any in weeks.

    I knew she was primed and ready, and I'd had fifteen years practicing on her to know how to play her body. I started as soon as we were in her front door. I breathed on her neck, simple but effective for her. She shivered. I held her around her middle and nibbled on her ear lobe. She moaned. Then, I nuzzled her neck; I wasn't playing fair. Then, I went for the coup de grace, rather clumsy, but very effective. My hand went down the front of her skirt and into her panties and played with her pussy. She came, and her knees gave way. I caught her and carried her over to the sofa.

    Her eyes focussed, "What the?" She questioned.

    I kissed her lips gently and whispered in her ear, "I could make you come five more times tonight if you let me." Then took to nibbling her ear lobe. Her description of her feelings at this point was “confused and horny.” She's recounted her version of the encounter to me many times, in my past, her future. Up until she closed the door and I made her come, she hadn't considered me as a sexual partner. I was twice her age after all. I had seemed to her to be a kindred spirit, in love with language.

    My initial assault had come as a total shock to her. That I could make her come in seconds was a revelation. Now my lewd offer. She was in two minds, it wasn't proper, but she was horny, so horny. So horny won. While she didn't give explicit consent, there was plenty of tacit consent. She didn't stop me. I knelt in front of her, to take up one of my favorite positions. I pulled her skirt up out of the way and drew down her panties. Then, I went in for the kill. Every trick I'd learnt in the last fifteen years with her; I used to get her off in a hurry. Again she came, she describes this one as "crushing".

    While she's still woozy from the orgasm, I pick her up and take her to the bed. I undress her gently, then turn her over, raise her hips, and pound her pussy as hard and as fast as I can. I'm channelling my inner fifteen-year-old in the clumsiness of my approach. It was a technique we'd found she liked, I didn't hear any moans, as her face was buried in the bed covers. I'm sure there were moans, I was living my number one fantasy again. I never tired of taking her like this. And again, she came. That way did get her off in a hurry.

    She flopped on the bed, I turned her over and hugged her. Slowly awareness dawned, speech took a little longer. She tried to look down, "Did you?" She was questioning whether I'd come.

    I replied, "Getting old sucks, one of its effects is I can pound away all night and not come." She looked conflicted at that prospect. She described her feelings as a mixture of anticipation of that, and horror at the though of that treatment all night. So I reassured her, "Don't worry, I won't, unless you beg me. But for now, I'm not going to make you come for another twenty minutes." I looked at the bedside clock; it was showing quarter-past. "That'd be at twenty-five to."

    She looked at the clock and flopped back from the effort. I then mainly just held her. A few gentle strokes, a little kissing and nibbling. Nothing overtly aggressive. She describes the anticipation she felt, wondering when I'd start up again, just working herself up into a frenzy, and I did nothing to help. I occasionally mentioned how long to go, "ten minutes." "Five minutes." "One Minute." Then, the clock showed twenty-five to. I wiped my finger up her pussy lips and pressed her clit. She exploded.

    When her wits returned, I just said, "Two more to go." She looked at me with an expression of awe, that's how she described her feelings as well. She was wondering if I were the devil and if she'd have to sell her soul to get me to do that again.

    We hugged for a while, letting her recover sufficiently, when I told her, "Time for a blowjob." And looked down at my dick which was still stiff and slightly sticky with her juices. Again, she looked slightly conflicted, but she crawled down the bed to do it. She says she was wondering how this would get her off for the fourth time, and that she didn't like tasting her own juices. But, when I told her to do it like that, the thought of tasting her own juices was so naughty, it was a turn on. I also answered her other question by saying, "And play with yourself while you're at it."

    That was also a turn on, as she'd never played with herself in front of anyone before. She felt so wicked and wanton, she confessed to forgetting about the blow job halfway through and concentrated on jilling herself. That was my impression of the blowjob as well, I was expecting it, so I didn't complain when she stopped. I let her finish herself off and moved to hug her.

    This time her reaction was "No more, please." I was expecting that too, so I told her we didn't have to do anything she didn't want to but I did still owe her the orgasm. She did offer to help me get off, she used her mouth and her hand and did manage to do it.

    I still said, "Getting old sucks." Several times. It does. But after my performance she didn't want to let me go. Despite the age difference we stayed together, she'd found someone with the patience and the skills to satisfy her.

    So began my second blissful period of living with Miss Greenway, her first. I helped her out of her financial problems; she moved into her house with me. I worked on growing my fortune and secreting away a large part of it, I'd need that later. She got the job teaching at my high school. Soon enough, I knew I'd have to face my younger stupid self. I spun her a tale about working on rejuvenation technologies, she let me alone as I tinkered away in the garage. She did say if I ever made it work, she’d give me a blowjob. Not that she needed much excuse for that, except an ever rarer hard on.

    She wasn't the marrying kind, but eventually I wore her down enough she agreed to marry me. We decided on a simple ceremony on the beach in Hawaii. Mr. King had been married before, so for a second marriage that wasn't so unusual. She went back to school for the fall, and we carried on being blissfully happy. She told me she'd not told anyone at school that she was married. So I said that she really should. After a few weeks of resisting the idea, she decided she would.

    That morning we were getting ready as usual, she called out from the bedroom, "Could you come in here a sec?" I walked into the bedroom, and she was standing at the end of the bed, she raised her skirt to display her panty-less pussy and sat down on the end of the bed and spread her legs. It was pretty obvious what she wanted, so I did. I took my, very familiar, position kneeling in front of her and started licking away at her very wet pussy.

    Being practical, we needed to get out of the house soon, I tried to hurry her along. If we have more time, I like to take my time about this, and enjoy it more myself. This time I French kissed the pussy, before zeroing in on the clit. It was standing up to attention, just waiting to be licked. I pressed it hard with my tongue and there were satisfying shudders, and she flopped on the bed. I got up, and she was lying on the bed, her arms above her head, and her skirt not covering anything. She smiled a very contented smile at me. Languidly, she said, "Help me up, while I find my knees."

    I held out a hand and pulled her to her feet. I kissed her, and she kissed back, and licked around my mouth. She was obviously feeling naughty tasting herself on my lips. She would really have liked to go back to bed for more, but we'd be late if we didn't move. One of us had to be practical, so I saw her to the door. She left her panties lying on the bed. She didn't always wear them to school, a thought which turned me on, and would have made my fifteen-year old self's head explode.

    Unusually, I called her Mrs. King, "Well Mrs. King, are you ready to tell your students about your new name?" Instantly I had a feeling of deja vu. The fateful day was upon me.

    She replied, "I am, Mr. King." And we got in the car, and I drove her to school. It was unusual me driving her to school, but it seemed like a new beginning. I got home and got everything ready, then I lay in wait behind the front door. I heard the footsteps outside, opened the door a crack and shot myself with the Taser, my younger self that is.

    His momentum carried him through the door as I opened it, and he crashed on to the floor of the entryway. God I was stupid back then, so it was easy to play my part in this. I quickly bound his hands and feet, I didn't want him jumping me before it was time. When he showed recognition, I said, "I really can't believe how stupid I was. Falling for that twice. And thinking I was going to turn up here and be Mr. King, it takes time to woo a woman, I've been at this for ten years."

    I really didn't want to interact with the twerp more than I needed to, so I got out my knife and cut the bonds, saying, "I did have some pointers for you, but you're really not worth it. Now get out of my house, I'll keep her for myself." I was lying, I had no pointers for him, I was just playing this as it played previously. I turned my back on him and walked off.

    I heard him shout "Hey!" as I walked to the garage. As I got into the garage, the package arrived as expected. The real Mr. King turned up, this is where I sent him, so my earlier self had the problem of disposing of the body. (I'd eventually buried the body in the back yard, to free up the yard clippings bin.) Mr. King burst into flames as expected, I calculated the potential difference between here and there was enough to cause that. I only expected him to burn, so if there was an explosion, I'm really not sure what that was. Then, I triggered the time machine and left the scene to my earlier self.

    I landed where and when I expected, and got to work putting my plan into action. I had plenty of resources with all the money I'd secreted away, so I got myself a nice hotel room, then I set to work. I worked on exploiting the flaw in Google's software to compromise their cars. Their post mortem document on that was very interesting, and helpful. Once I'd done that, I found Miss Greenway; she wasn't dead yet at this time. I whisked her away to the hotel as a surprise. I also deflected any questions about my sudden change in appearance, though the difference between fifty and sixty isn't as great as between thirty-five and fifty.

    I sent her car off to crash. I was going to have to work out where the body came from later, I never arranged that. It maybe I needed to disposed of a body sometime in the future, or maybe I was finally cremating her for real. I then took her off on a round the world cruise. When we got back, my younger self had disappeared and we were "surprised" that she was thought to be dead.

    Now, I get to grow old with her gracefully. Who knows what the future holds, I don't after five years out. I should probably write that letter about the experiment CERN should do. Should I write that under my own name? Then, I'll turn up missing someday and it'll be a mystery. Or I could publish it under my new name, that would make a splash, an unknown person with such a revolutionary idea. Or I could publish it anonymously, make a splash and a puzzle. Whatever, Physical Review D is the right place to publish it.
     
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    Interesting story. The time travel was a nice touch.
     
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    Great story, kinna sci-fi fan anyways. Most definitely out of place! This story was actually easy to follow-considering all the time traveling.
    And who didn't have a teacher crush:biggrin:.
    Really enjoyed this one also, very well done I'd say. Thank you for the entry, -your time and effort are appreciated! !
     
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    This one started off like many sex stories do and then got twisted, double twisted, triple twisted, quadruple twisted in the time line, and was tied up neatly at the very end. I'm no time travel buff, but I thought this was handled pretty darn good. SUPER HOT SEX and a BRILLIANT STORY!!! Scintillating work, Tony. :thumbsup:
     
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    Thanks @writerz01, @Norton X, @mlc101n I'm glad you all liked it.

    As I said, plotting this gave me a headache, keeping all the disparate times straight. But once I got the basic timeline, it worked smoothly. I've never written a time travel story before, but I've read and watched plenty.

    Actually, I never did have a crush on a teacher, but its a popular subject here.
     
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    Smashing work @tonybs - enjoyed it! It did get complicated and was a little hard to follow towards the end, I found myself having to go back and re-read parts, but you handled the complexities (and the time-travel paradoxes created) very well indeed.

    From what I can gather from chaps I know, that sort of teacher crush is common, and you made it sound very realistic indeed, well done. Good writing, hot sex, clever plot - bravo!
     
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    Great sex and time travel. Whats not to like? Thanks for the submission tonybs.
     
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    Thanks @JayneyRedd @Redbeard1031



    I’d be interested to know what tripped you up. I was trying to lay out the hero’s journey so it logically followed, but I was deliberately obscuring his motivations, so that the solution would be a surprise to the reader. I also used the common trick of using events in the past which were only mentioned in passing, so if you weren’t paying attention, you might get tripped up.

    I was thinking that there were big holes in the plot, in that the hero only did some things because that’s what he’d seen himself do the previous time he met himself. However, there is theoretical basis for this sort of interaction to be plausible in the real universe, see below. I feel much better after working that out.



    If you value your sanity, you can stop reading now.

    In researching this answer, I may have found a solution to an issue I was having with the story. I was going to mention the “Bootstrap Paradox” (that’s Dr. Who), but I think I avoided objects or information which had no beginning (the bootstrap paradox). What were left with no beginning were motivations. The hero did several things because that was the way it happened the previous time he was in that encounter (on the other side of it). That leaves no obvious reason for the motivations he has to do the things he does.

    Now it seems there may be a theoretical basis for this sort of thing to happen. First, there are solutions to General Relativity which look like time travel (I have to take their word for that, the math in GR is beyond me.) Then there was a guy called Novikov who suggested that events involving time travel would have to be self consistent, basically you can’t have causality which would cause a paradox.

    Next a guy (Polchinski) did a thought experiment to disprove that theory by contradiction. He suggested you shoot a billiard ball into a wormwhole so that it emerges in the past and knocks itself off course before it can enter the wormhole.

    That caused a couple of graduate solutions to look for, and find, a solution to that scenario where the ball emerged from the wormhole at a different angle, but still collide with itself. The collision itself was what caused it to emerge from the wormhole at a different angle. It was later found there were many such solutions, possibly infinite such solutions. The conjecture is that only the self consistent solutions (of which there may be an infinity, so plenty to go around) could actually happen in reality.

    So the interactions I put in, hero goes back in time and changes his own past in such a way that it causes him to do that change to his own past, is an example of a self consistent solution, thus allowed to happen in the real physical universe. In fact they may be the only solutions which are allowed in the real physical universe.
     
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    There was a lot going on in this story, and I think you did a great job of keeping it all straight.:thumbsup:

    I came across a few instances that I don't think were mistakes, but probably just regional dialect. Around here, we would say the time as .20 till, you use .20 to. I think both would be correct, just one of a few things that I found.:confused: (Nothing wrong, I just found it interesting.:))

    In the final sex scene with Miss Greenway, I felt a little confused. It seemed that your tenses kept switching around. I had to correct this in my own story when it became obvious it didn't work.:( This and a few other errors jumped out at me, and I think a final proofread might have picked them up. Considering how much thought went into keeping the timeline in place and accurate, I can see how you may have been distracted.:laugh:

    I think this is a great time travel piece, and I like that he had to go back and correct his initial mistakes. You did a great job with the twists and turns that his plans had to take to correct his scheme. I could follow it pretty clearly.:geek:

    The one main problem I had, is I didn't much care for the characters.:meh: It seemed that Miss Greenway was only interested in one thing,(Five times a day everyday?:jawdrop: When did the woman have time to teach?:facepalm:) and Mr King was so obsessed that it was borderline creepy instead of sweet.

    Overall I think this was a very good entry. I am planning on revisiting it before it is time to vote.
     
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    Thanks @Little Miss K

    After the hero's comments about spelling and grammar, I did wonder if anyone would be brave enough to lead with corrections.

    You were confused, how do you think I felt? What you're referring to maybe deliberate (though without knowing exactly which scene, I can't be sure). I was making liberal use of historical present and at times it even looked wrong to me. I very nearly did change one scene from hp to past tense in the last proofreading, but that required so many changes it was difficult to keep straight. And ended up reading worse. So it went back to hp. I think it may be correct, but confusing use of historical present.

    Interesting about the twenty to/twenty till. I just tried to look up the regional variations of that and failed. I did find, Brits might say "twenty before", New Englanders say "twenty of", and someone has the opinion: "Some Americans say quarter till ten, which Michael Swan on the BBC Worldservice reports is due to old Scottish English. Hence its effect in the US is strongest in Appalachia." I get the impression that would be not too far from you.

    I struggled a bit with that passage, as I didn't want to be specific about the hour. Normally the hero would have said hour:40. It might have been nine-forty, which looks weird when written. There's no way to pronounce :40, so I gave up and went to common time telling instead.

    I don't know if Miss Greenway was only interested in one thing, the story is told through the lens of the hero's obsession. I was a bit surprised when she turned out to be quite so horny. I didn't know that about her until she sat in the car and then offered the blowjob. However, that fit so well with his obsession I made it a theme.

    You really shouldn't like the hero. It wasn't borderline anything, it was so far beyond the borderline, he's a certified psychopath. A gun is not an appropriate reaction in any circumstances. But they're a weird lot around here, so most people have liked, or identified, with the hero, psychopathy and all.
     
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      With the English I grew up around I wouldn't be surprised if I have just heard it wrong my whole life.:D

      In fact... Without some outstanding teachers, and a love of books instilled in me at an early age, my comment could have very well looked something like this...

      Gee mister. Y'all spin a mighty fine yarn you hear. That'us some darn gud writin' you done there.:hilarious:
       
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      Hi , both , maybe as a Brit , I can give a Brits perspective , every Brit I have heard say that say "TO " 20 TO 1. quarter to six , 5 TO 9 , TO and PAST . There are as always some Brits who, will say 5 after 5 , and I think there is no, right or wrong , but 99 % of Brits use " TO "
      I hope that helps . Xx
       
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      One of the references I found was a Brit saying they stopped saying "twenty before" as it always tripped up New Englanders, now they were living in New England. Maybe a dialect somewhere. Whatever, I've always said "twenty to", but whatever someone said to me, if it was intelligible I wouldn't notice.
       
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    Hmmm. I definitely have mixed feelings about this story. Technically, especially for such a long story, there were few issues, and really none that I need to point out. So from a grammar nazi POV, you're safe.

    I like sci-fi. The first story I ever published was sci-fi. Time travel can be very cool. It opens up a lot of possibilities. In fact, it could be a KAW/CAW theme at some time in the future. :) So, I liked the premise of the story.



    Tony, you're a likable fellow...which is why I'm struggling right now with this review, because I want to be honest in my opinion, but I also don't want to piss you off, because you are likable. And, obviously in reading other people's comments, I find myself in the small, narrow minority.

    I felt like the story read like it was a sex story written by my high school Physics teacher, a man who was brilliant, but when he cracked a joke, it left everyone baffled because no one had the IQ to catch the punch line. This story seemed dispassionate. The words were there, the sexual acts were there, but it lacked passion. I think the absence of dialogue (sparse overall, compared to the non-dialogue) made it read more like a thesis than a story.

    The storyline was fine, better than fine. The descriptions, well, I didn't have a problem with them, but, I think you went way overboard on the physics. I care how it works, but two sentences would have been sufficient. Paragraphs of particle acceleration...no.

    I agree with one reviewer above in that the teacher was kinda' flat and one-dimensional. For all intents and purposes, she was a Real Doll. She needed some depth, I felt, in order to give a bit of humanity to the main character, who in this piece was not only the protagonist, but the antagonist too. That's an okay premise, but difficult to pull off.

    You referenced in a reply to a comment something along the lines of "people around here..." as an explanation for something. Don't think of people around here as an entity that you're trying to reach. Think of yourself as one of the people around here. To reach the common folk, be common. Write technically flawlessly, but don't try and impress with complicated premises and fifty-cent words. Having a high IQ is great, I know, but save the tech journal writing for non-fiction. Write like you are having a good time. Write like you're talking to your non-Physics Club buddies at a BBQ.

    I'm gonna' stop now. The bottom line is that you put a huge amount of work into this piece, and for that, I commend you. I like you, I like your writing...this just left me a bit untouched as I couldn't connect and buy into it.
     
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    Thanks @ahorsewithnoname Sorry it didn't work for you.

    Your review criticizes the story mostly for things which were deliberate, so I'll put it down to artistic differences. One thing I've learnt from these competitions is you can't please everyone. I find the opposing points of view interesting, thank you for being honest and forthright.

    That sums up perfectly the hero. So exactly what I was trying to achieve.

    There was only one paragraph on particle physics and one on dynamics in the middle, then the one at the end. I did wonder if I'd run into resistance on the technicalities of time travel. Given his proclivities as above, he had to include some detail. So I had to invent a whole new method of time travel. (I'm quite proud of that.) The three paragraphs on the implementation are supposed to be humorous, I think they're hilarious, especially the use of the PLOT device. But then I have a weird sense of humor.

    As I said in response, pretty much deliberate.

    I wasn't trying to impress anyone, I was writing for myself. This is the sort of thing that would go down well with my buddies, the SF nerds who were liberal arts majors.

    Like I said, sorry it didn't work for you. It wasn't that much work. It took me one evening to fix the time line, two evenings to write the plot, and another to write the sex. Overall, I'm very happy with the story.
     
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    Thanks for the tremendous amount of work and thought into this!

    Hush....an alias
     
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    A nice dark story, I liked the way you started off with the 15 year olds first response to conflict to be murder and then carried it through the rest of the story culminating with him finally killing the originally Mr King like he had planned in the middle. I thing the dispassionate way you told it represents a higher functioning psycopaths outlook on life quite well they are goal orientated and those goals are always based on their pleasures.
    Thank you for taking the time to write this.
     
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    Hi Tony , well,, what a STORY! I loved it , definitely my favourite entry , well you actually know this already .

    Ok, it is a complicated story but not overly so, maybe becausd I loved it , I took it in more , I dont know . Its interesting , (thanks for the tutorials ) a little sad, funny , romantic , especially in an obsessive way) and very, very horny ! You can clearly see that you are in your comfort zone.

    The grammar nazi connent made me giggle , (was that directed at the likes of me I wonder? :D Meh ! I can take it :p)

    Obviously I was sad when Miss G broke his heart , but how true an interest in a teacher can make a student stick in , or vice versa. How even when he was older in the second incarnation , he was still talking about "banging" Miss G , basically most of the way through he was still that horny teenager! It was funny how , he went from thinking it was a crude thing to say to saying it all through his life , all, the while developing something world changing. All in order to "bang" someone, hilarious! Though I'm sure things have been invented for shallower reasons than even that !

    The "Back to the Future" references , and the changing the speed meant a delay , and he was too desperate to get in her pants to wait 8 1/2 months , was so funny , as was the chickening out because its hard to have a head on crash in to a cliff , Really ? :p
    I was right there with the nettle rash , I could feel it , (though that could be because I really lost a few tussles with a goat as a kid. ( :p) and ended in a big pile of nettles a lot myself, ugggh!)

    Including what the mistake was that made him want to shoot her was great and the line "I could put myself down ' anywhen ' " was fantastic .

    I loved how you went back in time over and over , refining, explaining reasoning , but not explaining a lot just little snippets , keeping secrets and it was good that he was thrown off by "old Mr King " not being him as he was , when he was tasered , and then changing everything !

    You dragged me right in to the sex scenes , I laughed as I could just see his cross-eyed lust face . The role play was very hot ! The wondering if he'd made her go to work happy every day, and if she'd sucked his older self's dick that day , and every tiny thought should have made both his heads explode , fantastic!

    I have to say though , for me going right back and meeting Miss G when she was studying was the crowning glory (especially for him ) because he knew her very intimately , was able to be her sexual savant was genius !! To get her hooked right from the start , especially for me ( being led by my loins as I am ;) ) outstanding . Sublimely conceived concept !

    A very hot horny , time travelling, mind bending tale of love (in the end , or the middle , well at some point in time :p ! ) and the things that can be acheived when you want to bang someone !

    For me your best story, I didn't see any mistakes , but when your hoovering it up you tend not to .

    This obviously took a helluva lot of thought, planning and research. Thanks so much for the effort . Good luck , oh, did I say I liked it :p Luvs xx
     
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    Thanks all.

    @Hush Very inscrutable review

    @1 Toy Maker That's how I was trying to write it. The disturbing thing was how easy it is to write with that voice.

    @luvsalik Thank you, a pleasure as always. As she said, I know already that its her favorite story as she was my reviewer again. This time the story needed surprisingly little help, only half a dozen comments or so. The story more or less wrote itself once I got the timeline sorted.

    The grammar Nazi comment wasn't directed at you.

    The Back to the Future reference was problematic. It should probably have gone unremarked, but if I had left it unsaid someone was bound to have brought it up. So it was a preemptive strike at my audience, even if it really didn't fit the character. But as I said, I was playing that scene for laughs.

    As I said, the planning the timeline gave me a headache. But even I didn't entirely know what was going to happen while I was writing the bulk of the story. His last jump into the future was added half way through. Originally he was going to have to come to terms with being shot by himself. That may have been more dramatic, but not his style.

    The sex was interesting, it emerged organically from the plot, not as an add on. Though I did write the scenes in a second pass. I also wrote them in reverse order, this was interesting in it allowed earlier/later encounters to influence later/earlier encounters. The idea of meeting someone who already knows you intimately is also interesting. Doctor Who tried to do it with River Song, but they chickened out on the really good bits.
     
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